day tripper

This is really good. I'm realy glad I decided to read this. You're a good writer, but maybe some more detail on Vienna or something, you know?

Bandages: Part Three I quickly backed up from Dustin as he came after me. My back hit the beam from under the bleachers. I squinted, trying not to mutter the ...

Huh? Haha sorry I'm lost.

I walked down my high school hallways with my sweatshirt down. I wanted everyone to see the damage that Dustin did to me. I was wearing a spaghetti strap shirt ...

The other critiquers tooks what I needed to say (Good job guys!(;) haha But for my own opinion, I really like this. Like fo' real. My friend Bailey writes boy ...

Well see, this all happend so quick but Celia is so numb that she could barely keep track of what was going on. And when she was running out, that's ...

Thanks(: Yeah, I didn't know how to rephrase some of the sentances I used.

I was listening to my iPod one day and thought of this. Hope you like it(: _______________________________________________________________________ I don’t really know what was wrong and I definitely

I could understand that writing is the best way to let this out. I congrate you. Here for comfort: I love you! d: I'm looking forward to chapter 4.

Wait, no! I'm not worried if there is more love parts on the way... Are you okay? Are you able to write about this? So this is ALL about you, ...

Oh my god, this is really good. I mean, not like you know, her being raped... that's upsetting, but the way it was described not to the point where it ...

Ohhhh i like it(: It's very unique. I didn't expect them to be into Horses, especially Ryder. Since he's a wolf and all... haha But I love how she talked ...

Haha; thanks sokool15: the main character is me. X: But no, she's supose to be like that in the begining. She changes, see, Aaron is like, hmm how should I ...

This chapter is kind of long. I'm sorry it took so long to write; I've had a bit of personal things happening. But here it is! Chapter 3: The First ...

Ahh yes see, this is why I don't write poems. haha It was just something from when I was feeling down. The last time I wrote a poem was.... like ...